Там кое-где даже рифмы не наблюдается.только честно говорите где изъяны в тексте:
you thought of him
the luciest person in whole the world.
but it`s one dream
of your imajination.
yes,ofcourse,the fortune smiled to him
but then he changed priorities
and luck of fortune left him
and all your dreams
forever crushed
he`ll be forever young
forever beautiful
but just
you can not see
the price of it.
It can only he.
And every night he sit
And look through all his soul, on his portrait
through all his disadvantages
He can`t find something good
And even only one advantage.
Yes,it`s rather good
At 46 look like at 25
But the price of it
It is great.
To be forever young
and beautiful
forever young
forever beautiful
It`s great,but
the price of it
Impossimle
And horrible.
To be forever damned
So he must
Forever damned to be
Accursed to be
Forever damned.
И всё это на песню immediate music-catch the falling sky..ну как?



Говорить-то говорю, но петь.. Хрип получается. Вот.
, говорили "будет крепкий голос если разрабатывать".